Show, Not Tell: Flash

Flash was at the big local swimming pool & was about to do his laps in the big pool.

Once Flash was in the pool doing his laps he started to go really slow so he started to sink to sink but luckily he was fast enough to swim back to the surface.  Once he was out of the pool he dried himself off then went to the park because he thought he needed a walk.  

It took Flash 3 hours to get to the other end of the park but he eventually got there. When he did get there the sun was setting and Flash knew that it was time to go home.

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  1. Great story, Sally! It's so ironic that his name is Flash. You have great structure to your story. I'm wondering if you can think of a synonym for some of the smaller adjectives (e.g. big, slow).


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